Tuesday, October 30, 2007

From Sugar to Shit in Just a Bit

She visits. We hug, and then kiss. We sit down to talk. We laugh and play. Our love is bliss. I say something. She misunderstands. I joke about it, she overreacts. I shrug, she curses. I yell at her, she yells back. I ignore her, she screams. I grab a beer, she hits me. I sip my beer and watch the TV. She sits on the bed and starts to sob. I turn off the TV and try to hold her. She pushes me away and curls up on her own. I try again, and fail again. I sigh, and sip my beer. Her cell phone rings. She wipes her eyes, and answers with the breathless hello she usually reserves for me. I turn on the TV and try to focus. Her whispered words distract me so. She soon sits up and cuddles a pillow. The call lingers, ands soon she laughs. I look at her, she turns away. Her whispers drop an octave. She giggles again, and leaves the room. I hear her lock the bathroom door. My jealous hearts quickens pace. My state of mind is insecure. Giggles and laughter are all I hear. They make her happy. I wonder who. When give her pain is all I seem to do. From across the door I listen in. I hear the smile in her happy hum. She comes out soon and stares at me. I’m leaving you, I hear her say. She knocks the sunshine out of my day. I sit on the floor and close my eyes. Something deep within me dies.

30 comments:

Nyemoni said...

Hey Imbre...I'm so Firrrrrrrrrrrrrsssssttt! Lol, I can't believe I'm doing this! lol...

Nyemoni said...

Oh how blue! You write very well my brother, you should publish your stuff sometime.... God job! really good writing!

Waffarian said...

The begining of the end.....how painful.

Atutupoyoyo said...

Sugar to shit. LOL. Great rhythym. You have a gift for poetic prose. Keep writing bro! Your people are waiting

classybabe said...

This is really lovely

Obinwanne said...

Good piece, very very nice and lovely, but sends a very painful ending..

ibilola said...

awwwww!kai! u dis boy, u have a way wit words o!

Correct PH babe said...

I really love the way you write! You should write something for me.

Porter deHarqourt said...

@Nyemoni...
...thank you so much, and congratulations again.

@waffarian...
...*singing* e dey painee me o!

@atutu...
...eish! yo uare always too kind my brother. long time sef. how tins?

@classybabe...
...glad u liked it.

@obinwanne...
...hopefully, we'll all have happy endings when it matters. thanks for stopping by Obi.

@ibilola...
...Ha! u think? so why am I at a loss for words when it really matters eh? you tell me!!

@correct ph babe...
...stop teasing me abeg! you wey dey play hard to get. LOL!

badderchic said...

See how you dey feel sexy with yourself just beacause you have written another masterpiece *hisses batts eyelids and farts* i mean you. lol
loving this...really am

CATWALQ a.k.a LAGBA-JESS said...

Awww...
She walks away
You let her go
In a little while
there's someone else
walked away chick returns
But you are no longer by yourself

princesa said...

Sure she didnt feign that phone call just to get you worried???

Ehen before i forget, i loved that ur comment on my blog! BADU GUY!!!

geisha said...

i like. much!

Zahratique said...

I like this!

Maybe I'm a disturbed person but i think it could pass for a narration of suicide. As in 'leaving you' means killing herself. Not that you r a bad guy... I dunno. My interpretation :)

Flame said...

Seems to me like she was putting on some sort of show for your benefit,all the giggling and pillow cuddling,...my guess is she hasnt gone very far.sit this one out,something tells me she might be back soon.
by the way nice way with words

badderchic said...

respect your old age and update o!

Atutupoyoyo said...

Ol boy I dey o. Na u dey scarce. We no dey even see your break light again. U full ground?

kokolette said...

beautiful!!!

Mommy said...

Oh My...

Queen of My Castle said...

Awwwww, this so makes me want to cry, and I don't easily cry.

I agree, this is a really beautiful piece. You are a great writer! Where have I been all this time?!

Love the way you capture the raw emotion of it all.

Zephi said...

awwwwwww, that was sad..you sef wetin you tell the poor girl wey she vex like that..neways, i like the way you write, very captivating

Allied said...

I love this.. Sorry if it is a true story. I could just picture the story. Well written.

Refining-Truth Betold said...

lmao

Afrobabe said...

usually its just ur mind playing tricks on u...she is a woman..we know the effect tears and whispered phone calls have..lol..chill...

2ndCorin5:17 said...

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW!!
Gosh, i'm in sooo much awe right now.. wow!
wow

AnyaPosh said...

Did you get back together? There must've been an underlying reason why babe just snap like that! Great work, I'll be back for more.

ìnk said...

hello.
i ran into your blog through a reference from jaja aka the burnt melons blog.
theis post inspired the form and theme of my current poem.

http://inkwrotethis.blogspot.com/2008/05/long-distance.html

hope the reference did u justice!

all the best.

ìnk said...

the link again is

http://inkwrotethis.blogspot.com/
2008/05/long-distance.html

rethots said...

Apparently, 'tis not only being caught in the 'act' that makes "Something deep within me dies." but, the littlest of action (or deed).

Lady Koko said...

awwwwwwww......
koko lurrrrrrrrve darling...koko lurrrrrrrrve..xoxo